Dear DJ,
im an aspirining music producer. been doing it for a while now. if u get a chance id like u to check out my music and let me know what u think. u dont have to but if u get bored and have a moment it greatly appreciate u checkin it out. you abviously know the industry.
– aspiring producer
Dear Dear Aspiring Producer:
Let’s start over. You are contacting me to listen to your music and give you feedback on your project. Let’s pretend that I am an industry person who can make a difference and help you with your musical career. On the initial contact, you need to make me want to listen to your music, as I am flooded with requests like this.
Some suggestions:
1. Check spelling.
2. Use punctuation.
3. Use capitalization.
4. Use correct grammar.
5. Don’t use familiar terms, i.e. ‘u’ instead of you.
6. Most importantly – show me that you are excited and proud of your music, not that I should listen to it if I “get bored.”
A little professionalism with your contacts will help you a lot in your career.